Main Forums >> Production - Mixing, Mastering, Gear & Techniques
        Print Thread

Pages: 1
stollypop



Joined: 15/03/12
Posts: 79
Loc: Hervey Bay. Australia.
What do you think of my track?
      #1039602 - 24/03/13 12:10 PM
Hello all. I have been asked to offer up some songs for a record label who have a young female singer. So this is a song i have done with my friend Tanishia on vocals. It's just a basic bedroom demo on a Zoom 16 trk, no computers were used in the recording. Do you think it's ok to send out? i have kept it very simple verse, chorus, verse, double chorus etc straight to the point and done. Thanks, hope you enjoy the trk.

youtube

Edited by stollypop (24/03/13 12:13 PM)


Post Extras: Print Post   Remind Me!   Notify Moderator     Back to top
The Elf
active member


Joined: 14/08/01
Posts: 9436
Loc: Sheffield, UK
Re: What do you think of my track? new [Re: stollypop]
      #1039609 - 24/03/13 12:31 PM
Typing as I listen...

It's a neat little song. Nothing wrong with straight-forward simplicity as long as you can carry it. Simple songs can be hard to pull off.

The mix sounds a bit congested. The drums are phasing strangely. If this is a deliberate decision I might suggest a re-think, because the drums need to be the solid spine of the song. The song has a good, simple feel to it that keeps me interested.

There's not much stereo width in the mix, yet the vocals are pushed out toward the edges, giving them the feeling of an 'add-on', rather than the lifeblood of the song. The vocals also begin to get lost when the mix fills out.

Some of the vocals are a bit out of tune. The doubling isn't enough to disguise this.

When a song is this simple and open it needs to be performed very well. The vocal is everything, but here I'm afraid that the vocal isn't cutting it, IMO. The tuning problems need sorting out, the performance needs attititude and it needs to sit in front of the mix and command attention - the mix needs to do everything it can to support the vocal and push the hook.

It's pretty good, but it could be much better.

HTH!

--------------------
An Eagle for an Emperor, A Kestrel for a Knave.


Post Extras: Print Post   Remind Me!   Notify Moderator     Back to top
Phil O
active member


Joined: 03/09/03
Posts: 1537
Loc: Scotland
Re: What do you think of my track? new [Re: stollypop]
      #1039610 - 24/03/13 12:31 PM
Given the tech limitations, it's a very good demo.

As to whether it's good enough to 'send out', that depends on your relationship with the recipient (e.g label A&R). If you are known to them and they are receptive to listening to WIP then maybe OK. For a 'cold' pitch to a decent indie / major label, I think it needs further development. As it stands, it's a bit 'samey' throughout.

Personally, I'd go for some gutsy live drums that really open out in the chorus. Maybe strip back the verses and make them more sparse. Also I think it's crying out for a great middle eight to introduce more variety and take the listener to another place.

Just my 2c


Post Extras: Print Post   Remind Me!   Notify Moderator     Back to top
stollypop



Joined: 15/03/12
Posts: 79
Loc: Hervey Bay. Australia.
Re: What do you think of my track? new [Re: Phil O]
      #1039700 - 25/03/13 02:02 AM
Many thanks for the comments. I do know the record co man and i did tell him this a basic bedroom demo just to give him an idea of the songs i'll be sending. I left out a middle eight big intro, outro, solos etc as i wanted it simple and to the point, all the extra bits can be added later if they are keen on the trk. As for the vocals, yeah i know there are mistakes here and there but as i only have the singer for around an hour and half i have to let some things go. I thought if i left it basic then they could hear what they want to add to it so i didn't colour it in too much. Thanks chaps, appreciate your comments.

--------------------
Ahh ha ha, ever get the feeling you've been cheated?


Post Extras: Print Post   Remind Me!   Notify Moderator     Back to top
Pages: 1

Rate this thread

Jump to

Extra Information
1 registered and 8 anonymous users are browsing this forum.

Moderator:  David Etheridge, James Perrett, zenguitar, Martin Walker, Hugh Robjohns, Zukan, Frank Eleveld, SOS News Editor 
Forum Permissions
      You cannot start new topics
      You cannot reply to topics
      HTML is enabled
      UBBCode is enabled
Rating:
Thread views: 870

September 2014
On sale now at main newsagents and bookstores (or buy direct from the
SOS Web Shop)
SOS current Print Magazine: click here for FULL Contents list
Click image for September 2014
DAW Tips from SOS

 

Home | Search | News | Current Issue | Tablet Mag | Articles | Forum | Subscribe | Shop | Readers Ads

Advertise | Information | Privacy Policy | Support | Login Help

 

Email: Contact SOS

Telephone: +44 (0)1954 789888

Fax: +44 (0)1954 789895

Registered Office: Media House, Trafalgar Way, Bar Hill, Cambridge, CB23 8SQ, United Kingdom.

Sound On Sound Ltd is registered in England and Wales.

Company number: 3015516 VAT number: GB 638 5307 26

         

All contents copyright © SOS Publications Group and/or its licensors, 1985-2014. All rights reserved.
The contents of this article are subject to worldwide copyright protection and reproduction in whole or part, whether mechanical or electronic, is expressly forbidden without the prior written consent of the Publishers. Great care has been taken to ensure accuracy in the preparation of this article but neither Sound On Sound Limited nor the publishers can be held responsible for its contents. The views expressed are those of the contributors and not necessarily those of the publishers.

Web site designed & maintained by PB Associates | SOS | Relative Media