Typing as I listen...
It's a neat little song. Nothing wrong with
straight-forward simplicity as long as you can carry it. Simple songs can be hard to pull
The mix sounds a bit congested. The drums are phasing strangely. If this
is a deliberate decision I might suggest a re-think, because the drums need to be the
solid spine of the song. The song has a good, simple feel to it that keeps me
There's not much stereo width in the mix, yet the vocals are pushed
out toward the edges, giving them the feeling of an 'add-on', rather than the lifeblood of
the song. The vocals also begin to get lost when the mix fills out.
Some of the
vocals are a bit out of tune. The doubling isn't enough to disguise this.
a song is this simple and open it needs to be performed very well. The vocal is
everything, but here I'm afraid that the vocal isn't cutting it, IMO. The tuning problems
need sorting out, the performance needs attititude and it needs to sit in front of the mix
and command attention - the mix needs to do everything it can to support the vocal and
push the hook.
It's pretty good, but it could be much better.
An Eagle for an Emperor, A Kestrel for a Knave.