It's been a while since I posted on here asking for comments so I thought I'd put up my newest completed project.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lcx86Mfylgs

Please tell me what you think.

Merci.

Edited by Mike Stranks (18/05/12 11:25 AM)

It must be really horrendous then?

Hi Freya, Just listened ,and as before you have some interesting ideas. My only issue I guess, but it is a biggy, is the flow of the piece. I love hypnotic stuff, which I think you nod towards, however because the vocals are not repetitive , there is little to take you on a journey with the words. So my summation would say that the backing will work but with a far floatier vocal (if that makes sense), but as it stands there needs to be some more light and shade to support your words. However, still 1000 times more interesting than most crap that calls itself music. Dave

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I love hypnotic stuff, which I think you nod towards, however because the vocals are not repetitive , there is little to take you on a journey with the words. So my summation would say that the backing will work but with a far floatier vocal (if that makes sense)

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I think I understand what you mean. I might try something a little less wordy next time, focus more on the sound of the words than on what they actually mean... expression of sound rather than definition.

Yeah, although I think you could go both ways..more hard edged production/arrangement with those current words and delivery or , as you imply, sink into the sound more with your voice...only don't go too Enya!! Dave

Edited by Mike Stranks (18/05/12 11:24 AM)

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Yeah, although I think you could go both ways..more hard edged production/arrangement with those current words and delivery or , as you imply, sink into the sound more with your voice...only don't go too Enya!! Dave

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Hahaha that's too funny, Enya is exactly what I was thinking.

Hello Freya,

You remind me a bit a band from my youth: Siouxsie and the Banshees , but that's a long time ago...

I agree with Dave. I think you could also try to mix your voice less "in your face" and a little bit more towards the background. Then the other instruments will start to play a bigger role in the composition.

Besides that: my compliments! Dark and refreshingly original

Wim

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Yeah, although I think you could go both ways..more hard edged production/arrangement with those current words and delivery or , as you imply, sink into the sound more with your voice...only don't go too Enya!! Dave

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What did you edit Mike?

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No worries Dave... I just put the 'mix' icon-thingy on so that people would know it's a song for comment. Didn't change the text in any way. Was hoping that it would put it on all the posts in the thread, but it didn't...

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You remind me a bit a band from my youth: Siouxsie and the Banshees , but that's a long time ago...

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I know Siouxsie and the Banshees and that song in particular is one of my favorites.

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No worries Dave... I just put the 'mix' icon-thingy on so that people would know it's a song for comment. Didn't change the text in any way. Was hoping that it would put it on all the posts in the thread, but it didn't...

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Oh, that's what that icon is for. Sorry I didn't put it on the initial post!

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No worries Dave... I just put the 'mix' icon-thingy on so that people would know it's a song for comment. Didn't change the text in any way. Was hoping that it would put it on all the posts in the thread, but it didn't...

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Feel free to change my text anytime Mike...I thought that someone had finally intervened to raise my IQ somewhat. Dave

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i quite like it

there's a lot I don't like - i don't like the weakness of the snare....i think the overall backing could do with 'ballsing' up a bit and there is too much going on with the vocals

but

i love the 80's kinda synthy sounds...i love the melody and i love the structure of the backing

a few slightly harder edged (but still electronic sounding) snares and a little less words and I'd really like it...and maybe a bit better balancing of the backing to vocals - the backing track is quite weak (in volume, not necessarily execution) IMvHO



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