A good start. I like the backing a lot.
introduction comes to a close we're left anticipating the arrival of the vocal with some
eagerness, but the dodgy performance and vocal tone is a bit of a disappointment. The high
notes aren't being hit cleanly, which makes the performance less believable, and I'm just
not getting the feeling that the singer is committed to the story.
is buried back in the mix that it seems a bit shy to be heard, which doesn't feel right
for the song. I'd say the vocal should demand our attention and be strong and proud - a
Marilyn Manson 'LISTEN THE HELL TO ME!' sort of feel! Tonally the voice needs brightening
too - a bit of aggressive distortion might help, but not until the performance can stand
up without any production trickery.
I also feel the song could develop a bit
more - maybe a breakdown, or at least something to remove us from the comfortable feeling
that we know what's coming next. As it is, where the drums mute for a few bars, the rest
of the backing just continues without challenging our expectation - it's just a bit too
All just IMHO, of course.
An Eagle for an Emperor, A Kestrel for a Knave.