The guitars are stomping on the mix with big muddy boots. You need to spend some time with
EQ to leave room for the bass, and back them into the mix to become part of it - cut some
lows and look for some of the those resonances in the mids that are cheapening the sound.
Apart from the guitars and the kick drum, the rest of the arrangement is getting lost.
Have a look at the timings in the guitar track too. For this type of music to work
the instrumentation needs to be absolutely pin-sharp in time. The fact that the guitars
are so overbearingly loud is drawing attention to every slight timing error.
An Eagle for an Emperor, A Kestrel for a Knave.