I listened to the track last night. I wouldn't class it as electronica; it is more like
house music, with a standard 4/4 beat and looping sections which build up and drop out.
The problem was, as highlighted by The Elf, that it lacked formula; parts just dropped in
and out without working to a pattern or any sort of crescendo. Some parts seemed to have
notes which clashed and didn't sound right. Some of the loops clashed with others as well.
The lead part had an 8-Bit sound to it, but the music wasn't in the 8-Bit genre.
It seems that the OP won't be returning though, so it would seem pointless to put any
advice for him on how to improve his track. If he returns I am happy to give some
pointers.
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