lingyai wrote:Thanks for feeding back. May I ask, what were you listening to it on, and also, can you specify a couple of places where you hear lisping?
One of my all time fave songs! Marvelous composition and as often with Paul's, killer lyrics.
Listening quickly on AKG M50 as I'm tracking and reading the forum in a break.
Sang nicely, the delivery is much like Paul's (including a lot of the Queens accent :)
I would treat the vocals a little differently, your timbre is obviously not the same as Paul's (still good, just different), a little more upfront and less reverb.. Paul isn't dreamy in that song - just telling the story.
Lisps at (for example):
"At the ri_s
_k of being rude"
"She said it grieve_s
_ me to see you in such a pain"
My guess is simply too much correction (perhaps consequence of too much reverb).
The kick is (on the AKG) super-boomy! Went to listen to the Steve Gadd's original, and it has a quite short "thud". Same for toms. My guess is too long reverb queue and the kick's balance is to me a little too prominent in your version - almost a dance kick bolted on. :)
The entire kit level is a trifle too high to my ears - assuming you want to mimic the original tough.
Still, all the above (minus lisps) assuming you want get close to the feel of the original.
Thanks for the track, good inspiration.