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When You're Bad - Joe Johnstun

Postby joejohnstun » Mon May 16, 2016 11:00 pm


Hi! I posted this song here in its rough form and got some great critiques from some musical minds. You guys gave me some great advice on the kick, the excessive EQ scooping, the vox level, and the song structure. About two years later, here it is in its almost-finished form, thanks greatly to your help.

I wanted to give it one more pass here since you all gave me such great tips the first time around.

Thank you!


https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/when-youre-bad



When You're Bad

You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Your lipstick left on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful

Vodka
In a shot cup
With the sound up
And the Do Not Disturb us on the door
You're an artist
In the darkness
I am breathless
And the bedsheets beg me, beg for more

You're beautiful when you're bad
You push me to the edge
You have it all when you're bad
Leave your lipstick red on a cigarette
You dance on the table, dressed like a lady,
Drinking and driving me crazy
You're beautiful
When you're bad

In a second
We're suspended
As she dances
With her French Connection on the floor
We leapt in
To the deep end
She's a legend
And I'm letting her think that she's in control, you're in control
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Re: When You're Bad - Joe Johnstun

Postby joejohnstun » Wed Jun 15, 2016 11:48 pm

Hi guys! The main constructive feedback I received was that the switch from high to low vocals was a bit jarring. I thought it might be a formatting issue, so I made a reprise version of the song. This new version clears out the whole boring buildup and weird twists and turns and doublebacks, exchanging them for a more normal, coherent format like a regular, sane pop song. Check it out!

Here are the two versions so you can tell me which you like better. Thanks!


When You're Bad 2.0 (new reprise version):
https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/when-youre-bad20


When You're Bad (original):
https://soundcloud.com/joejohnstun/when-youre-bad
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