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I'll Be Doing All Right (Please help)

Postby SilverBeat » Fri Dec 30, 2016 12:59 am

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I may not Know
Every thing that I should
But I'm getting by just fine
I may not have done
Every thing that I could
But the stars and sun still shine
So if you come around
Don't bring me down
I don't want to hear your bla bla bla

Chorus

I'll be doing all right
Without your excitation's
I'll be doing just fine
Without your solititations of right

I'm may be slow
Every now and again
I'll keep working on my fast
I can loss my cool
Every time I'm a pain
But I'm sure that it won't last
So if you come around
Don't bring me down
I don't want to hear your bla bla bla

Repeat chorus

The sun gonna shine
Rains gonna fall
i'll be doing just fine
Though it all



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Re: I'll Be Doing All Right (Please help)

Postby Temp » Wed Jan 18, 2017 1:57 pm

I listened to a few tracks and it certainly sounds like music. It's quite robotic and rather predictable though, and doesn't offer anything particularly original or interesting. I couldn't detect any bass in this track at all, but on the whole, you can hear that you've put in a considerable amount of effort and that you're proficient at creating and producing songs. From your profile, I can see that you're a Beatles fan (me too), so although there's a wealth of material to emulate, attempts at doing so can often seem somewhat futile (it's good practice though). The result is pleasant enough, but can sound contrived.

I'm guessing the drums are programmed, which has the negative effect of stripping out any groove or soul from the tracks. I reckon they'll sound a lot better if you address the 'cheesy' sanitized orchestration and introduce a more authentic palette of instruments and more gritty and experimental production techniques (lo-fi, distortion, plate reverbs, delays etc.). To be honest, my music suffers from a similar set of attributes, with the result often sounding too 'twee' and worsened by the fact that I do everything myself; the whole essence of the Beatles was the diversity of the skills and 'feel' that each group member brought to the table.

Hope this helps.

Cheers.

SilverBeat wrote:
I may not Know
Everything that I should
But I'm getting by just fine
I may not have done
Everything that I could
But the stars and sun still shine
So if you come around
Don't bring me down
I don't want to hear your bla bla bla

Chorus

I'll be doing all right
Without your excitations
I'll be doing just fine
Without your solicitations of right

I may be slow
Every now and again
I'll keep working on my fast
I can lose my cool
Every time I'm a pain
But I'm sure that it won't last
So if you come around
Don't bring me down
I don't want to hear your bla bla bla

Repeat chorus

The sun gonna shine
Rain's gonna fall
i'll be doing just fine
Through it all

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