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Postby blinddrew » Sat Feb 04, 2017 9:44 pm

Bit of an unusual one for you today folks, looking for a bit of direction. I've come up with a short set of lyrics but I'm in two minds of where to go with music, I was originally minded to go with a quite upbeat tune. But, thinking further, it could be a real kicker with something more subdued. Here's the lyrics, all suggestions welcome:
Michael Birkeland's last night at home

This one is for Madelaine, it says be well.
There will be better times.

This one is for Peter, it says be true. It's all he needs to know.
This one is for Becca, she did nothing wrong, she knows this.

This one is for the dog, it's a bone.
This one is for you, don't open it yet. Please.

This one's for Tom, I changed my mind.
This one is for me, it says goodbye.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby One Horse Town » Sat Feb 04, 2017 10:03 pm

Not sure about the 'dog and bone' bit.....you're at risk of getting into cockney rhyme etc.
The rest is good.......standout verse is the last one. I'd start with that then backtrack from there or perhaps use it as a recurring verse. It suggests a ballad to me rather than anything faster.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Sun Feb 05, 2017 8:11 pm

One Horse Town wrote:The rest is good.......standout verse is the last one. I'd start with that then backtrack from there or perhaps use it as a recurring verse. It suggests a ballad to me rather than anything faster.

+1

I really like this quirky lyrical approach blinddrew, but it does need to be a slower number to my mind.


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Sun Feb 05, 2017 8:31 pm

Cheers folks,
Have been working on various approaches today and given it up for the time being as I'm knackered and not focusing properly.
Also I'll have to change the title as it turns out Michael Birkeland is a real (and moderately famous) person.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Mon Feb 06, 2017 9:13 pm

blinddrew wrote:Also I'll have to change the title as it turns out Michael Birkeland is a real (and moderately famous) person.

That's always a problem - I once spotted a spoof video dedicated to a Martin Walker :beamup:


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Mon Feb 06, 2017 9:31 pm

Playing around with a couple of options at the moment, here's one: https://youtu.be/wZ0aio8inMU and there's another in the list, but I'm not really happy with them.
Could be one to throw to the band and see if they want to run with it I think.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Mon Feb 06, 2017 10:08 pm

Or there's this one I just came up with but I think I'm just churning stuff now: https://youtu.be/NnqE-D2efqI
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Mon Feb 06, 2017 10:23 pm

blinddrew wrote:Or there's this one I just came up with but I think I'm just churning stuff now: https://youtu.be/NnqE-D2efqI

I LIKE that! :thumbup:
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Mon Feb 06, 2017 10:53 pm

Now I'm just confused! :) I'll give it a week and see how it lies.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Tue Feb 07, 2017 3:43 pm

Just listened to them both again and realised why I like no.3 so much better - no.2 reminds me of (wait for it) 'Streets Of London' while on no.3 I can already hear a string quartet and plucked double bass coming in later on the arrangement 8-)

3 just sounds more memorable and 'bigger' in scope to my ears :thumbup:

...while during no.2 I imagine hearing the chinking of glasses and the rustling of crisp packets from the audience :thumbdown:

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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby awjoe » Tue Feb 07, 2017 4:49 pm

Martin Walker wrote:Just listened to them both again and realised why I like no.3 so much better


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Tue Feb 07, 2017 5:39 pm

You make a compelling case!
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Wed Feb 08, 2017 2:43 pm

blinddrew wrote:You make a compelling case!

Yes, it comes in a variety of colours, complete with brass handles and easy-move wheels :beamup:

No.3 it is :clap:


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Wed Feb 08, 2017 5:41 pm

Just to put you off your stride, or in the interests of full disclosure if you prefer, there's now a version 4 as well...
https://youtu.be/r7tjQgfi_iM
I promise that's it though ;-)
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Thu Feb 09, 2017 10:54 pm

blinddrew wrote:there's now a version 4 as well...
https://youtu.be/r7tjQgfi_iM
I promise that's it though ;-)

:o :roll: :shock: :crazy: :think: :wtf: :shifty:
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Fri Feb 10, 2017 12:11 am

It's a bit different to the others :)
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby Martin Walker » Fri Feb 10, 2017 7:31 pm

Sorry old bean, I still prefer no.3 personally :oops:

But then I probably won't be the target audience :headbang:


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Fri Feb 10, 2017 9:35 pm

Martin Walker wrote:Sorry old bean, I still prefer no.3 personally :oops:

But then I probably won't be the target audience :headbang:


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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby petev3.1 » Sat Feb 11, 2017 1:24 pm

I like the words. I hear Cat Stevens, and also his vocal delivery. To me these words don't want to be 'jazzed up' or casual but sung on the beat quite evenly. Almost like a children's choir would have to sing it. It's all personal taste, of course, and this is just how it seems to me.
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Re: Happy or sad?

Postby blinddrew » Sat Feb 11, 2017 2:27 pm

Cheers Pete, will give that a bit of thought. My starting point was a conversational vibe, but I'll have a play.
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